This term we have been focusing on writing recounts and using the success criteria to help us check our work. We have written recount from a moment in the past that we have had we also put in our plan. This is my recount.
Planning About koala
Where: Australia in a zoo
When: 2014
Why: because it was fun and cool to hold a koala
How: I went into the koalas place that had lots of trees for them to eat the leaves and sleep in the trees
Who: me, sister, mum and dad
What: I held a fuzzy koala
What did I say:
“The koalas are so cute.”
“The koala dug her nail into me.”
“It is so heavy.”
Words for the koala:
fuzzy
Cute
Fluffy
The success criteria
-Hook the reader in.
-Include the important information for the reader.
-Include details so that we know how the reader feels ex. Feel, sound, touch, who, what,where,when and how.
- in past tense
Koala
I was in the Australian zoo in 2014, a very very hot day, we went into their habitat. When I saw them I squealed with excitement, they were so fluffy. Me my sister and parents were looking at the koalas sitting in the eucalyptus trees.
Some of them were Sleeping with their little eyes closed and curled up, and some were crawling around on the trees. I said “ they are so cute!” I was bubbling with excitement.
I could not wait to hold the cottony Koala, that was sitting right in front of me. Then they put the koala in my arms and I whispered “ it’s so heavy and the nails are digging into me, but they felt so soft and fuzzy.” to my mum.
I didn't get to hold the koala For that long, so it was sad when I had to hand her back. It hurt a lot when the koala dug her nails into me, because it was really hot in Australia, so I had a short sleeves shirt on,the nail were on my skin.
I will never forget how cute they are.
It was great experience to be able to have. I think that everyone would like to hold that koala, because it was so fun, I wish I could do it again.
two medals and a mission.
medal- I Put In all the background information.
Medal- I put in personal expressions of attitude and feelings
Mission- my next step is to put in more punctuation to make shorter sentences.